Absolutely enthralled by this one. The language, the descriptions, the feeling of actually being in there with Pete - it's all brought together by the inimitable style you have. Loved it. Time now to get my pulse slowed down. But I'm in a predicament. I want Pete to get out. Now his mental state is such that he's "floating" and hardly conscious there's not much fun in watching him. I'll have to choose something between the two extremes. He's let out eventually but there's more uncertainty and tricks to play on him. I can't see his jailer just arriving and letting him go, Pete wouldn't be in any state to treck off. So what does he do with him? Getting Pete to regain consciousness and find himself fully dressed and out on the trail seems a bit weak. Was the "voice saying something" at the end the loudspeaker, the jailer actually there or his imagination? I can only conclude that I want an ending that's between the two extremes but with a twist that only POW can conjure.
slave, thanks so much for the compliments... but clearly I have screwed up! I need to make it clearer that you can click the three links at the end to display the continuation of the story as you wish: to a happy ending, a dark one, or something in between. I'll see if I can edit to better convey that.
There, I added some explanatory text. Hopefully that helps. I meant to provide you with three endings, but instead I left you with none! Sorry about that.
Again, thank you. Now I've read all three endings I can say that the dark and the one between are both great, true endings that fit the story for me. The dark ending slightly less so but perhaps that's because I'm afraid of it, both for Pete and my own imagination. I think the "between" one suits best as it continues with the reality, somehow it's all believable. I'm not making myself very clear here but personally I enjoy these stories when they have a ring of truth and for me that ending fits so well. Pete has to struggle through a panic to get out but finally makes it. His captor is never revealed and we are never quite sure if the invitation to return will be taken up. I'd love to know if it was. POW, you write excellent stories, to my mind the "literature" of the genre. Thank you again for sharing.
I'm glad you were able to get the full experience, slave. There is definitely sequel potential in that invitation to return in the in-between ending. (Of course, there's sequel potential in the dark ending as well.) We'll see if the writing muse strikes and grants me inspiration to continue.
Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm honored and touched and grateful.
Absolutely incredible story. i chose the "dark stuff" ending - and it was the best one. The writing was full of detail and color so could imagine being there - feeling it, smelling it, tasting it. Thank you for the great work!
Enjoyed the story very much, not just because of your ability to write very well, but because I've visited the Edge several times, and it brought back the memories during this time of no play due to the virus.
I've been lucky to visit Edge twice. This story is fantastic and realistic. This gives me ideas for a sentence for me to endure if there's guard/Dom that wants a prisoner/captive for a week. Nice job!
I just found out about your stories and choose this one to start reading. I tried all the endings and liked the dark one best. My tastes are usually less dark, but I appreciate a well-crafted story involving dungeons, prisons, and other venues where consent is minimal or absent.
Very interesting idea to have multiple endings. Feels almost like a choose your own adventure book at the end. I'm sure if POW were to make a text based game it would be quite popular ha ha.
I'm delighted to hear you say that. As it turns out: there is such a story! Take a look at In10sity (https://powauthor.blogspot.com/2009/09/in10sity.html) if you'd like to give it a read.
I found writing In10sity to be amazingly difficult... I had to draw a two-page map to keep track of all the possible choices and pathways and keep them all consistent. It was a lot of work... which is why it's the only one of its kind so far on the site.
Absolutely enthralled by this one. The language, the descriptions, the feeling of actually being in there with Pete - it's all brought together by the inimitable style you have. Loved it. Time now to get my pulse slowed down.
ReplyDeleteBut I'm in a predicament. I want Pete to get out. Now his mental state is such that he's "floating" and hardly conscious there's not much fun in watching him. I'll have to choose something between the two extremes. He's let out eventually but there's more uncertainty and tricks to play on him.
I can't see his jailer just arriving and letting him go, Pete wouldn't be in any state to treck off. So what does he do with him? Getting Pete to regain consciousness and find himself fully dressed and out on the trail seems a bit weak. Was the "voice saying something" at the end the loudspeaker, the jailer actually there or his imagination? I can only conclude that I want an ending that's between the two extremes but with a twist that only POW can conjure.
slave, thanks so much for the compliments... but clearly I have screwed up! I need to make it clearer that you can click the three links at the end to display the continuation of the story as you wish: to a happy ending, a dark one, or something in between. I'll see if I can edit to better convey that.
DeleteThere, I added some explanatory text. Hopefully that helps. I meant to provide you with three endings, but instead I left you with none! Sorry about that.
ReplyDeleteMy bad. Maybe need some discipline.....I should have realised not jumped in. Thanks for your reply. s.
ReplyDeleteAgain, thank you. Now I've read all three endings I can say that the dark and the one between are both great, true endings that fit the story for me. The dark ending slightly less so but perhaps that's because I'm afraid of it, both for Pete and my own imagination. I think the "between" one suits best as it continues with the reality, somehow it's all believable. I'm not making myself very clear here but personally I enjoy these stories when they have a ring of truth and for me that ending fits so well. Pete has to struggle through a panic to get out but finally makes it. His captor is never revealed and we are never quite sure if the invitation to return will be taken up. I'd love to know if it was.
ReplyDeletePOW, you write excellent stories, to my mind the "literature" of the genre. Thank you again for sharing.
I'm glad you were able to get the full experience, slave. There is definitely sequel potential in that invitation to return in the in-between ending. (Of course, there's sequel potential in the dark ending as well.) We'll see if the writing muse strikes and grants me inspiration to continue.
DeleteThank you so much for your feedback. I'm honored and touched and grateful.
Absolutely incredible story. i chose the "dark stuff" ending - and it was the best one. The writing was full of detail and color so could imagine being there - feeling it, smelling it, tasting it.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the great work!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.
DeleteFantastic story. I would love to visit the Edge and serve some time there. The cell block sounds amazing.
ReplyDeleteI would too!
DeleteEnjoyed the story very much, not just because of your ability to write very well, but because I've visited the Edge several times, and it brought back the memories during this time of no play due to the virus.
ReplyDeleteAs someone who has visited Edge before, I love this story!
ReplyDeleteI've been lucky to visit Edge twice. This story is fantastic and realistic. This gives me ideas for a sentence for me to endure if there's guard/Dom that wants a prisoner/captive for a week. Nice job!
ReplyDeleteI just found out about your stories and choose this one to start reading. I tried all the endings and liked the dark one best. My tastes are usually less dark, but I appreciate a well-crafted story involving dungeons, prisons, and other venues where consent is minimal or absent.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting idea to have multiple endings. Feels almost like a choose your own adventure book at the end. I'm sure if POW were to make a text based game it would be quite popular ha ha.
ReplyDeleteToast Boi -
DeleteI'm delighted to hear you say that. As it turns out: there is such a story! Take a look at In10sity (https://powauthor.blogspot.com/2009/09/in10sity.html) if you'd like to give it a read.
I found writing In10sity to be amazingly difficult... I had to draw a two-page map to keep track of all the possible choices and pathways and keep them all consistent. It was a lot of work... which is why it's the only one of its kind so far on the site.
Thanks,
- POW